Wednesday, March 14, 2012

Journal #3

Rahul and Sheila goes to Rahul's house. They go to Rahul's bed and get undressed. They fooled around for awhile until Shelia gestured eith her hand that she was ready. Rahul then goes inside of her. Rahul saw Sheila reaction towards his member was calm. He also decided to look at the blanket and saw that it wasn't drenched in blood. Rahul then gets dressed and leaves.
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  1. Ms. MacchioMarch 15, 2012 at 10:41 AM

    Roxanne-

    This is a good attempt of the third person point of view, but the piece it too short. If this piece was longer, the crisis action would have a stronger emotional impact. You have an interesting story to elaborate on. Keep working on it and stay focus!


    -Ms. Macchio :)

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